Talk:Reinhardt (Overwatch)/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs) 16:50, 5 March 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Tarlby (talk · contribs) 18:26, 5 March 2025 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Tarlby

Heyo, I'll be doing this soon. Tarlby ^{(t) (c)} 18:26, 5 March 2025 (UTC)

Lead

• "the resulting franchise." ---> "the resulting franchise." WP:EGG
• "Reinhardt is a German soldier who fought during a robot uprising known as the Omnic Crisis. Forced into retirement due to his age..." ----> "Reinhardt is an aging German soldier who fought during a robot uprising known as the Omnic Crisis. Forced into retirement due to his age..." In my opinion, this is a little clearer by introducing his old age earlier.
• "...how his character has matured over the course of the game's lore and continues to grow." Is this final tidbit really necessary?
• "Meanwhile, he has also been the study of academic analysis into character design, observing how his appearance, movement and even hypermasculine aspects..." ---> "He has also been the study of academic analysis into character design, observing how his appearance, movement and hypermasculine aspects..." If you can, it'd be great for you to strike out my tweaks or marking them as done when you do them. Thanks. Tarlby ^{(t) (c)} 17:20, 6 March 2025 (UTC)

Conception and creation

• "...Geoff Goodman suggested the idea of a large number of character classes for players to select, but with class specialization for each" The use of "but" implies this clause contrasts with the previous idea of there being a large number of classes. Does this exactly apply?
• "...the design went through various tribal-themed concepts, with the flamethrower replaced with an arm mounted shield while the flail was occasionally..." ---> "...the design went through various tribal-themed concepts, with the flamethrower replaced by an arm-mounted shield while the flail was occasionally..."
• "...little girl piloting the armor, a idea..." ---> "...little girl piloting the armor, an idea..."
• "When designing his armor, they initially..." ---> "When designing his armor, the development team initially..."
• "...by artist Ben Zhang, and consists of a large two-handed hammer and a..." ---> "...by artist Ben Zhang, consisting of a large two-handed hammer and a..." So as to avoid too many "ands".
• "Meanwhile his hammer..." Comma.

Appearances

• Stuttgart, Germany is a real city. You can link this.
• "...under the codes of valor, justice and courage." Add the Oxford comma.
• "A member of the Crusaders, a military group using power armor and armed with large rocket hammer weapons, the Crusaders fought a..." ---> "A member of the Crusaders, a military group using power armor and armed with large rocket hammer weapons, they fought a..."
• "After the death of his mentor and loss of his eye..." ---> "After the death of his mentor and the loss of his eye..."
• "...Overwatch remained a global peacekeeping taskforce until Reinhardt was forced into retirement at the age of fifty, and Overwatch disbanded after accusations of corruption." I believe "taskforce" should also have a space in the middle.
• "Years later as another group..." Comma.
• "...Overwatch's related animated media." ---> "...Overwatch's related animated media." WP:EGG
• "Alternatively he can project an..." Comma.
• Noticed you unlinked Tank. You can redirect it to Characters of the Overwatch franchise#Tank heroes as you did in the infobox.

Promotion and reception

• "...with a scholarly paper published examining the physics of the weapon." Could we know what this scholarly paper is?
  • Added the name of the journal to avoid having to rework the whole sentences; it has several authors and the title itself is a bit clunk to drop in there by comparison.
• "...in-game camera swaying as he walked as well..." Remove "as well" due to repetition with the previous sentence.

Sourcing

Planning to check:

• Ref 1
• Ref 2 (do you have a free online version I can read from?)
• Ref 4 Good
• Ref 7
• Ref 8
• Ref 9
• Ref 11
• Ref 13
• Ref 15
• Ref 16
• Ref 17
• Ref 21
• Ref 22
• Ref 24
• Ref 25
• Ref 26
• Ref 27
• Ref 28 (free online version?)
  • For Ref 2 this should be readable here.
  • For Ref 28, it should be downloadable in PDF form from the website itself.
  • Sorry about not striking the text as I went, I wasn't sure when you were done and didn't want to hit you with an edit conflict.--Kung Fu Man (talk) 20:19, 6 March 2025 (UTC)