Talk:IMac (Apple silicon)/GA2

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:57, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 17:02, 26 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 06:24, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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A lot of comma changes, but the article is very much on its way. It helps you've written others like it and have the format and reception content down pat. I added a screen reader–only table caption and that's about it. Ping me when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:38, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

The line was revised in 2023 to use the Apple M3 chip, and in 2024 to use the Apple M4. Remove the comma (WP:CINS)
the Ethernet port on the power supply (dependant on configuration), and the 3.5-mm audio jack on the left edge of the iMac.
- Correct spelling of "dependent"
- Remove comma
The iMac captures audio through an array of three microphones, and outputs sound through a six-speaker system that supports Dolby Atmos. Remove comma CinS
The cheaper models come with two Thunderbolt/USB4 ports next to the power button at the back edge of the computer, and lack Gigabit Ethernet as standard. Remove comma CinS
In contrast Dan Seifert, writing for The Verge, questioned whether a "a simple all-in-one desktop computer is something most people want or need at this point." MOS:LOGICAL: when quoting a sentence fragment, periods outside of quotation.
with TechRadar's Matt Hanson wrote that should be "writing"
Katie Collins from CNET said the design was a statement piece that served as a "symbol of hope" while working from home during the COVID-19 pandemic; and also considered this to be part of an anti-minimalism trend, an end to "austerity" in product design. Remove semicolon CinS. No punctuation belongs there. You could do Katie Collins from CNET said the design was a statement piece that served as a "symbol of hope" while working from home during the COVID-19 pandemic; she also considered this to be part of an anti-minimalism trend, an end to "austerity" in product design. as it would link two independent clauses.
while others appreciated the addition of ethernet on the brick allowed for reduced desktop clutter add "that" after "appreciated"
The iMac's speed was positively noted, with Engadget testing finding the machine's responsiveness waking from sleep mode or starting up welcome, and Monica Chin noting the iMac achieved higher single-core Geekbench performance scores than any previous iMac, including the iMac Pro. Consider splitting this sentence at "welcome".
though some reviews of the M3 models were surprised by its games performance Were reviews surprised or reviewers?
Tom's Guide and Digital Trends found the entry-level iMac disappointingly limited, and the added costs to add Touch ID unreasonable. Remove comma CinS
Other complaints included the paltry number of ports and their placement, and the low amount of starting memory and storage in the entry-level machines. Change the second "and" to an "as well as" to retain the comma.
The Apple Silicon iMacs pivoted the line back to a consumer focus, and away from enthusiast and professional use cases, Remove comma CinS

Sourcing and spot checks

Reviewed: 9, 23, 27, 32, 35

No issues.

Images

The vector illustration is appropriately licensed. The iMac logo falls beneath TOO.

Hey Sammi Brie thanks for the review. I've been out of town and away from my computer, so sorry for not seeing this before, but I'm working on the above now. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 18:20, 12 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Sammi Brie the above should all be addressed now. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 19:57, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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